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As global trade increases, many goods, including those we use on a daily basis, are produced in other countries and have to be transported long distances. do the benefits of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?

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As International
trade
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 has become virtual in the world,
products
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 can
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be purchased
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purchased
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purchase
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 from other
countries
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 by transport of long distances. In my opinion, I believe that the advantage is bigger than the disadvantage because it brings income of the
nation
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 and various
products
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 to
people
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.
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 with, global
trade
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 has a minor demerit which is missing
products
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 by long-
distancedistance
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distance distance
 transportation. As
products
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 transport form a
long distance
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long-distance
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nation
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, plenty of
products
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 might need
transported
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to be transported
transporting
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 by
devirst
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first
 place in frequency, and
then
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goods
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be
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are
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 lost or broken.
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, my boss frequently buys bulk
products
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 from Korea, but there is always missing
goods
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 when he
received
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themreceived
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.
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,
products
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 being missing is a problem in
long distance
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long-distance
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 transport.
On the other hand
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, there are huge advantages that can supersede minor disadvantages.
Firstly
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, it brings vast income
of
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 the
nation
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. When the
nation
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 generates
products
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 which fashion or popular, it exports to other
countries
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 can help
countries
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 have income and
also
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 allows nations to have an opportunity of job.
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, China generate and export many
products
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 and
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 became a large exporter.
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, it allows
people
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 to use various
products
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 from other
countries
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. Though global
trade
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 became commonly, we can buy foreign
goods
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 easily, which is some famous
goods
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 are produced in another country. But we still can buy from depart stores, so It will be convenient for
people
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.
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, nations can earn money and
people
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 can easy to buy
goods
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 from far away
countries
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. To sum up, global
trade
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 creates more benefits than drawbacks, it helps
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nation
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nations
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,
people
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 and
also
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 brings convenience to us.
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