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WRITING TASK 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task Write about the following topic: Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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It is undeniable, that
music
 is one of the tools to build
a
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familiarity in the past. I strongly agree with
this
 statement. In my
opinions
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opinion
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, it can convey emotions and feelings to
audience
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an audience
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 of the society.In the following paragraphs, the reasons to support my opinion will
be outline
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.
To begin
 with the advantages of
music
, I think
music
 can make a relationship between
people
 all around the world.
Although
 it has different ages, nationalities and
culture
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cultures
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but
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when
the
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people
who
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listen to
music
, their feeling will be better. For
the
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example, the woman who will be a mom in the future can
use
music
 to join between mom and her baby. I have
khown
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known
 about how to make the patients feel better and some cases of the hospital, the doctors will
use
music
 for them.
Moreover
, now we do not
use
music
 only
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human
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humans
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, but we can
also
use
 it with animals and plants.
Additionally
, we can join and listen together when we like the same kind of
music
,
therefore
, the
people
 who are different can be preached and shared some part of the difference. One more example, I have
friend
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 and she is
the
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a
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 foreigner. She is around 23 years old and like to
tolisten
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listen
Thai
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 songs or learn
Thai
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the Thai
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 language now because she used to be my roommate and I usually open
Thai
 songs.
Finally
, she became absorbed and can sing
Thai
 songs. In conclusion,
music
 can make the advantage with the
people
 who are different of the society because it has some power to make human's mind and feeling.
Additionally
, it can make a good relationship between
people
.
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