The continued rise in the world's population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

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The number of individuals is increasing dramatically. One consequence of the rising community causes society in modern life. I totally agree that it is the greatest trouble faced by society. According to some facts, there are some causes and factors of

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continued rise.

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of all, today's healthcare and medical knowledge are developing in many people than poor areas.

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, China and India's medicine is the prime cause.

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, there are no world wars and big fights between

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, the peace impresses like

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of humankind.

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, the lifestyle and financial condition of some public are rising

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of the poverty.

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enthusiasm is increasing for sex and life.

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, some

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culture is kindly and generous,

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, they desire to have a lot of children.

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, my country's government give the price to extended family. They all interact with the continued rise in the world's society.

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, some countries, which have a lot of people restricted to having two or more children in a family.

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, the order does not show effectively. Some poor countries cannot assist to have a health their people.

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, the small factor cannot stop to rise in today's population. In conclusion, we cannot stop to continue the number of

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but we cannot try to help each other with every problem. I agree that mankind is the most important problem

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we continue to care for each other.

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, we always win over each trouble and problem.

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The continued rise in the world's population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Some people work for the same organization all their life. Others think that it is better to work for different organization. Discuss both views and gives your opinion.

In the past, when students did a , they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad? Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?