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Every day, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. Why do you think this is happening? And how can we solve this problem?

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One of the biggest problems facing all over the world today is that too much
food
 is wasted. Some reasons that account for
this
 trend can be identified, but there are some steps to be taken to change the situation.
Initially
, there are various reasons why
food
 is being wasted in manifold areas of the world. The
first
 reason is that in developed
countries
 people buy
food
 items more than their needs.
For instance
, in each meal, they cook a lot so that they are unable to eat it all, which makes
food
 be leftover.
Beside
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 that reason, another factor is that people do not have preservation methods due to a lack of technology development
especially
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 in undeveloped
countries
.
For example
, in
India
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 it is not affordable to buy a fridge or freezer or use preservatives for their
food
, which can lead
food
 to be easily perishable. Despite some reasons mentioned above, there are several possible solutions that can be taken to mitigate
this
 problem.
Firstly
, the government should raise awareness for citizens to buy and cook just enough to eat. They just have to buy and cook only for one meal to avoid wasting
food
 and money.
By contrast
, in undeveloped
countries
,
they
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should invest more money in farming, transportation and preservation methods.
For example
, they can receive sponsorship and investment from foreign
countries
 to have modern technologies and improvements. As a
consequence
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 they can facilitate the traffic development to reduce the time to delivery, which might minimize the possibility of
food
 spoiling. Given the points raised above, wasted
food
 is indeed a prevalent problem, but there are solutions that are relatively doable. Being aware of
this
 problem is not enough, people must
also
 do their part to use
food
 economically.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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