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Your friend has been offered a place on a course at the uniersity where you studies. He/She would like your advice about finding a place to live. Write an email to your friend. In your email. describe wher you lived when you were a student at the university recommend the best way for him/her to look for accommodation warm him/her of mistakes students make when choosing accommodation Write at least 150 words. You do not need to write any addresses.

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Dear Risa, Hi, how are you? I hope
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 letter finds you well. I am excited to hear that you will be attending Kyoto City University and I am glad you reached out to me for some advice for your accommodation.
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, let me describe where I used to live when I was a student at Kyoto City University. I lived in an apartment in North West of the city and it was only a 10-minute walk from the campus. Since North West is where the University is located, I would recommend you to live in that area. There are many facilities nearby
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 as grocery stores, restaurants, and a train station, so it is very convenient and many students are living in that area. The best way you can find your accommodation is to search the internet. There is a website called "Kyoto Living For Students" and it has the largest number of properties available for young people in the area. There is something you should be aware of before making a decision. You should not make any decisions unless you see a property with your eyes. And
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 makes sure if there are enough public transportations available. I hope you find my advice helpful. Let me know if you find a place to live. I look forward to hearing from you. Best wishes, Naomi
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