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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person's culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

#people #person #culture #character #choice #clothes
During these
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 days, judging other's
tradition
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traditions
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 and
personality
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personalities
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 based on clothing is a common phenomenon.
However
, I totally disagree with
this
 situation and
this
 essay will
disucss
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discuss
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First
 and foremost, it is impossible that clothing style can tell the detail of
people
's culture and character.
In addition
,
majority
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 of
people
 choose their dressing
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 on the place, weather, and trend.As an
exemplary
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, the public would love to wear
comfort
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 dresses in summer rather than heavy dressing
style
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styles
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 because
since
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the weather is very hot. What is more, it is clear that employees have to wear their uniforms
instead
 of their liking. On the one hand,
character
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the character
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 is not the thing that can be easily known with physical appearances.
People
 can find other's true
color
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colors
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 based on their manners, mindset and skills. There is no doubt that
asian
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people
 have to western clothing
such
 as suits and dresses according to a circumstance. Different cities have different traditions that have been created by their histories.
Therefore
, a choice of clothing is not able to judge the culture. To sum up, if clothing becomes the fact of
juding
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judging
 others, the comments will be definitely wrong.
Although
 dressing code is important in
this
 society,
this
 phenomenon would be thoughtless.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attire
  • fashion trends
  • individuality
  • first impressions
  • designer labels
  • social status
  • cultural appropriation
  • dress codes
  • traditional garments
  • sartorial choices
  • symbolism in clothing
  • cultural identity
  • expression of self
  • global fashion industry
  • cultural integration
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