Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for, and allow their children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children? What consequences could this style of parenting have for children as they get older? Write 250 words.

I can say that parenting is
skill
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the skill
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with no formal education. Why
it's
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skill? because
there's
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there are
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no general parenting patterns for
children
. Especially, because the
children
are human with
free
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spirit and free will.
Moreover
, when they are growing up, they can use their brain and
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to decided something, that they
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thought
taught
,
best
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for them. So, as
a
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a parent
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parents
how to prepare our
children
with the best ability to help them in the
next
future? Some
parents
choose to show their endless love for
the
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children
by giving them everything they want. There is no strict rule for them
,
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because maybe the
parents
argue that
children
will learn something from what they decided.
Eventhough
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Even though
, they put the wrong choice, they will know it and learn from that mistake.
Furthermore
, there are
also
some
parents
who didn't want to make bad
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memories
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memorise
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memories
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with their
children
. So that, they give complete freedom
for
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the
children
. In my
oppinion
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opinion
,
this
type of parenting
paterns
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patterns
is not completely good. Because
children
need to be learned how to make
a
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best decision with all the capability we have.
Moreover
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when we are in
the
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a
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difficult situation and have limited resources,
they
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we
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must be learned to be
patiens
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patient
patients
and how to make
priority
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. While the
children
always get what they want, it might
made
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them become
demanding
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a demanding
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person
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. Overall,
parents
need to be the best example figure for their
children
. Even we love them unconditionally, but teach them about sharing, caring, patients, and struggling are very
usefull
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useful
for them to have a good personality and be the best person in the future.
Hopefully
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they will be
an
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independent,
thoughtfull
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thoughtful
and bring
hapinness
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happiness
for
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the
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society.
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