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Besides a lot of advantages, some people believe that the Internet creates many problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Write 250 words.

#people #internet
Despite it
gives
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 us
lot
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 of extent advantages, some people think the
internet
also
 gives us a bad effect. I agree with them as I believe the
internet
 should be treated wisely in our daily use. The reasons
of
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this
 notion will be described in the following paragraphs.
First
, the
internet
 may be the only tool that
give
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 us the opportunity to get
a fast
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fast information
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information
, but there will be a lot of
information
 available that come
in
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on
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 the
internet
 as well. Since we wanted to catch up
the
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 latest
news
,
then
 we will be overwhelmed with the
news
 given
in
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on
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 the
internet
. Not to mention, there will be
also
a bad
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bad news
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news
 or worse,
a fake
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fake news
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news
, swarming through our device. We really have to make sure the use of the
internet
 will advantage us as a user, and will not waste our time that can be used for something good.
Moreover
, our personal
information
 is
also
 the one that should be
concern
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 for all of us. As we become more dependent
to
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on
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 the
internet
, we may put our personal
information
 on the
internet
, and we live easier with the help of the
internet
.
Consequently
, we have to be very careful not to give our identity to those who try to steal our privacy. Passwords, addresses, and
birth-dates
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 are several
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pieces of informations
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informations
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pieces of information
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 that
crucial
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are crucial
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 to put
in
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on
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 the
internet
. In conclusion,
although
 the
internet
 will give us
the
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 handy life, it could give us some problems if we do not use it properly. The
internet
 user should know the risk and the danger behind the
internet
 extravaganza.
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  • Consumer behavior
  • Virtual marketplace
  • Cybersecurity
  • Digital footprint
  • Return policy
  • Comparison shopping
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  • Logistics
  • User interface
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