Besides a lot of advantages, some people believe that the Internet creates many problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Write 250 words.

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gives
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us
lot
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of extent advantages, some people think the
internet
also
gives us a bad effect. I agree with them as I believe the
internet
should be treated wisely in our daily use. The reasons
of
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this
notion will be described in the following paragraphs.
First
, the
internet
may be the only tool that
give
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us the opportunity to get
a fast
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fast information
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information
, but there will be a lot of
information
available that come
in
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the
internet
as well. Since we wanted to catch up
the
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latest
news
,
then
we will be overwhelmed with the
news
given
in
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the
internet
. Not to mention, there will be
also
a bad
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bad news
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news
or worse,
a fake
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fake news
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news
, swarming through our device. We really have to make sure the use of the
internet
will advantage us as a user, and will not waste our time that can be used for something good.
Moreover
, our personal
information
is
also
the one that should be
concern
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for all of us. As we become more dependent
to
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the
internet
, we may put our personal
information
on the
internet
, and we live easier with the help of the
internet
.
Consequently
, we have to be very careful not to give our identity to those who try to steal our privacy. Passwords, addresses, and
birth-dates
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are several
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pieces of informations
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informations
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pieces of information
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that
crucial
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to put
in
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on
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the
internet
. In conclusion,
although
the
internet
will give us
the
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handy life, it could give us some problems if we do not use it properly. The
internet
user should know the risk and the danger behind the
internet
extravaganza.
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  • E-commerce
  • Consumer behavior
  • Virtual marketplace
  • Cybersecurity
  • Digital footprint
  • Return policy
  • Comparison shopping
  • Customer reviews
  • Retail therapy
  • Logistics
  • User interface
  • Payment gateway
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