Some people think scientific research should focus on solving world health problems. Others think that there are more important issues. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Although
some parts of the community argue on
conducting scientific Change preposition
that
studies
only limited to health-related problems
, another group oppose this
by suggesting research on other subjects. study on subjects like the solar system or new energy
sources
are
important to the evaluation of mankind but, to prevent its extinction from the earth , Correct subject-verb agreement
is
governments
should be
prioritised health-related Unnecessary verb
apply
studies
.
To begin
with , since ancient times several health-related problems
like communicable and non-communicable diseases have been faced by humans and some diseases like pandemics had
able to erase the majority of humans from the Earth. Wrong verb form
have been
As a result
, to face these health-related problems
,governments
spend millions of money on studies
. To illustrate this
, during the current corona
pandemic , most Correct your spelling
coronavirus
governments
around the world have spent a lot of money to develop vaccines and ultimately it had
prevented the death of millions of lives.
Wrong verb form
has
On the other hand
, some governments
and private companies are more interested in other research subjects like new energy
sources
and solar systems, mainly focusing on the business and future development of mankind. Since some communities around the world are already feeling a shortage of energy
sources
, these kinds of studies
are also
important to overcome the future demand . For example
, according to
the World Bank report in 2019, by 2040 fossil fuel will be an end and to overcome the shortage of energy
requirements,people need to think about new energy
sources
.
In conclusion , even though some people believe in spending money on non-medical researchers to overcome problems
like energy
sources
in the future , prioritising medical studies
will prevent the extinction of mankind from the planet earth
. Capitalize word
Earth
Hence
, this
writer wishes to opine that , we must prioritise medical research rather than other studies
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