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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

#people #information #research #business #world
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Internet is a
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 platform where anyone can share their personal thoughts, views, knowledge and opinion on various matters. There is a debate between
people
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, to what extent the content needs to share publically while some
people
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 support that
information
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 less worthy should be generally available. In
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both situations.
Information
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 sharing places
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 as newspapers,
internet
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the internet
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 and radio are the fastest means of communication. Keeping the nation updated with topics
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 as scientific research, business and the academic world will be an eye-opener for many
youth
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, employees,
manager
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managers
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 and other
working class
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people
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 to
take
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 necessary changes in their decision.
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, the new trends would highlight the development and progress of the country.
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, publishing research articles can help the other student
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, efforts of collecting the data, analyzing, organizing, compiling and drafting it appropriately should not be available for free to everyone. They should earn from their hard work, and, so they believe in charging in the form of subscribing or purchasing their book. These books may contain
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 that cannot be understood by everyone.
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, case sensitive
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 of government reports cannot be shared with
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 but it could be shared within the ministry. In conclusion, data can be circulated in public but there should always be a limit to it. If everything is shared
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people
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 would not be socializing and rather stick to papers or screens which will have a negative impact.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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