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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam.’ How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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In the past three decades,
the
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most
road
 in the cities in the world has been overfull by automobile because of a rapid increase in
car
 ownership.
This
 essay agrees with that accusation, and give some examples
on
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 how the government is trying to discourage
people
 to
use
 their engines. It is commonly understood that having a
car
 is much more convenient than using public transportation, but enormous traffic can cause a negative effect in person. There are pros and cons of owning a
car
,
although
 it causes congestion
in
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 the
road
, most of the
people
 have
car
 including the allowed teen because of conducive to travel and time control.
Furthermore
, rerouting is
also
 possible because of having a private
car
. Despite using a private
car
,
road
 traffic can cause some
people
 headaches and irritation.
For instance
, EDSA in the Philippines,
it
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is a major
road
,
however
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 almost you cannot catch up with your desired time because of too much traffic.
On the other hand
, government officials are trying to convince the
people
 not to
use
 cars.
For example
, in our place, the
car
 has coding, whereas the
last
 digit in the placard cannot travel on
specific
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 day in a week to lessen the
car
in
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 the
road
.
Moreover
, a project
such
 as
road
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 widening is applied. Another factor to consider is the maintenance of the engine that there are
standard
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 to pass the
car
 and can able to
use
 it. From my point of view owning a
car
 can make the
road
 congested and make the
people
 angry and the government are making various solution that discourage the individual to
use
 their
car
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • air pollution
  • noise pollution
  • quality of life
  • economic losses
  • public transportation
  • congestion charge
  • carpooling
  • pedestrian-friendly
  • urban planning
  • incentives
  • electric car usage
  • environmental impact
  • dependency on cars
  • fuel wastage
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