An increasing number of professionals such as doctors and teachers are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What can be done to deal with this situation?

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people
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who get a
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level
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physicians
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and professors chose to leave their poor
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to work in developed
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. The main problems
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causes are
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bain of
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who had reached
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and
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the cost of
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, and the most viable solution is to
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the salary for these
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professionals
. It
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that in poor
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people
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who were able to get a degree tend to move abroad to find better opportunities of job. Dreaming to get a better life and job is the main movil to move to other
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in which they start their family and
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stayed there permanently. Another problem
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causes is that the cost of
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will
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in those poor
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because there will be less demand and fewer
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might be able to pursue
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third level
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education
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.
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,
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who had less
education
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tend to have more children in their marriage and
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cause a lower style of living
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and
in
a circle of poverty.
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, before in Mexico, the university
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was almost unaffordable for those who came from work-income class and
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anyone who cannot afford an
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to think to emigrate to
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ccountries
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countries
like the U.S.A. The most viable solution is that the
goverment
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government
reinforce the law to
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the salary of all these doctors and professors, so
hey
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they
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decided to stay in their country.
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, they have never had to emigrate to others cities.
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, in these poor
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, they could help
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citizens to continue their
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by
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maintaining
those jobs opens and inspiring future generations to pursue
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higher
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.
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, nowadays, the situation in Mexico has changed because
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President Manuel Obrador has ordered to build hundreds of free-tuition universities to reverse the emigration issue and motivate young adults to stay with their families in Mexico.
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,
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emigration to the U.S.A has decreased tremendously. To
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, moving abroad to get a
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salary cause to lose the most well-prepared society in poor
countries
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that have weak laws and do not offer decent salaries to their
professionists
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professions
, so these lead to the rest of society to pay high fees-tuition for those who
persued
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a degree.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Brain drain
  • Skilled professionals
  • Healthcare systems
  • Education systems
  • Economic growth
  • Dependency on foreign aid
  • Social inequality
  • Quality healthcare
  • Quality education
  • Retain talent
  • International cooperation
  • Sustainable growth
  • Scholarships
  • Professional development
  • Remote work capabilities
  • Local research funding
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