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It is unacceptable that people who work in certain professions,eg.finance,media,entertainment and sport,are paid such high salaries while others, who do more important jobs in society,are underpaid.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I think that they are equally important. There are certain professions and others who play a vital role in all walks of life. Those who support the idea of
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 important jobs in society are underpaid may present
following
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 arguments.
For example
,
There
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there
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 are more and more
teacher
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teachers
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 who
choose
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 to teach
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 in the pool area in order to achieve charity rather than earn money, Meanwhile, if the others pay attention to realize what is paid in the work ,which would
lost
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 meaning in life, including: happiness, achievement, successful ,
snice
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since
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 these metal that l think more important to me than salary
However
, those who support the idea of unacceptable should be paid
such
 high salaries in the filed ,
such
 as fiancé ,media, recreation, and sport ,But these people who neglect the most important factor.that the cost of education university,If consider these factors for people who earn
such
 high salaries would be a normal
things
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,
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, they have to take out
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loan from government pay for university fee, which is why graduating with well -paying job is
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 option for them, as well as contributing to society.
This
 action is
way
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 to incentive how to improve their quality through university education. In general, we must acknowledge and appreciate the work that people who operate in essential fields do in helping to maintain the
fabrics
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 of society.
However
, it may seem that those who work in the media, sports and finance ought to be paid well for the time and privacy
which
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 they sacrifice. It is all equally important
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Public sector
  • 2. Societal well-being
  • 3. Compensation
  • 4. Perceived societal value
  • 5. Market demand
  • 6. Supply and demand
  • 7. Economic benefits
  • 8. Talent migration
  • 9. Ethical implications
  • 10. Equitable distribution
  • 11. Top talent
  • 12. Essential services
  • 13. Societal importance
  • 14. Public demand
  • 15. Fairness in compensation
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