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what are the main problems associated with using social media plateforms ? What are the most serious problems associated with the it and what solutions can you suggest?

Social
media
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 is the best thing to interact with or know about the world, but there are some problems
which
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, which
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 are the major ones on social
sites
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sites,
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that
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is
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as
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 many fake accounts, and to tackle
this
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,
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Id
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ID
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 proof
details
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 should be filled
must
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apply
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. I will discuss in detail its
problem
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 and solution in the upcoming paragraph. I think the main
problem
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of
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with
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 social
media
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 is
increasing the
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the increasing
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 number of fake accounts.
This
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 is because fake
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id
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ID
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 holders want to expand the wrong
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violence
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, violence
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and
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, and
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 scams. To explain, Facebook is the best way to spread
this
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content
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 on
the
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a
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 world level within minutes
as
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, as
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 almost every person uses Facebook because people can easily believe in the
content
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that is
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 running on social
media
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.
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,
politicians
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politicians'
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 IT departments spread much fake
news
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 about their opposition party so that they can let them down in people's eyes. The solution for
this
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problem
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 is to fill in
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id
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ID
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details
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while
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 making an account on social
media
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. To elaborate, when someone fills their
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id
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ID
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details
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 in their account, the company can easily find
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apply
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which one is a fake account
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. In
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in addition
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, for fake
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news
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news,
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 an organisation should check the
fact
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facts
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 about the
news
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.
if
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If
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 it is reported
fake
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as fake
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, the organisation should delete it from the page.
for instance
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.
there
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There
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 is a company named
fact check
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FactCheck
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 on Facebook
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, their
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their
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whose
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 main work is about checking
the
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apply
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fact
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facts
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 about the
news
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.
whenever
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Whenever
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 they see any fake
news
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is
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apply
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spreading
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spreading,
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 they make a pin or tag on that video, because of that, people ignore the fake
content
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. In conclusion, the biggest
problem
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 on social
media
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 is the
inclining
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increasing
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 number of fake accounts to promote fake
news
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 and scams .
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however
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,
To
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to
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 tackle
this
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id
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issue
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proof
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, proof
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details
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 should be mandatory.

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task
Start with a clear view on the topic and give your main idea first. Stick to this view and do not drift.
coherence
Link ideas with clear words and order. Use one idea per part and end with a short closing.
content
Give calm proof or proof steps. Name a few real facts that back the claim.
content
The essay shows a main problem (fake accounts) and a fix (ID check).
structure
There is a short end that tries to sum up the idea.
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