When a new town is planned, it is more important to develop public parks and sports facilities than shopping centers for people to spend their time in. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The priority of green
areas
developments and enhancing gyms or shopping centres has become a controversial argument in the Fix the agreement mistake
area
time
of planning a new city. Personally, I believe that both of the mentioned factors are important for people
to spend their time
in and it is a two-sided sword.
Anyone hand shopping centres are right all due to
both the economy and enjoyment. Many businesses are dependent on trading and also
people
need to be able to fulfil their needs. For example
, if a city does not have a good shopping centre, people
will have to go to another town to buy a dress or an umbrella which may result in dissatisfaction. Moreover
, shopping is not just about buying but it is also
a good time
and place for people
to hang out. It may increase the chance of buying because studies have shown that happiness positively affect
trading and gathering around with friends in malls is likely to make Change the verb form
affects
people
enjoy.
On the other hand
, public parks and sports facilities would play a key role in citizens' lifestyles and health. Pastimes in nature should have a great impact on mental health. In other words
, spending time
in public parks with a lot of trees and grass would help people
to breathe fresh air which boosts their mood. In addition
, residents can do sports such
as running in the parks or attending a gym. This
might confront the sedentary lifestyle of today's world. Consequently
, if the majority, especially the workforce, remain healthy and motivated, this
city would
see fast progress.
In conclusion, I think green areas and sports facilities positively affect the citizens' lifestyle but shopping centres are just equally important. Wrong verb form
will
As a result
, I would argue that one of them are
more important for a new town.Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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