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The below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

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The line chart illustrates the
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 of inquiries sent to the Tourist Information Office in a particular city via three means of communication, between January and
June
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 in 2011. It is clear that visitors to the city made more inquires in
person
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 and via
telephone
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, while written letters and
emails
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 became the least common choices.
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, the
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 of enquiries in
person
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 experienced the most dramatic change among the different options. In January, the Tourist Information Office received 900
telephone
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 enquiries, while just under 800 letters and
emails
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 were received. Not many tourists chose to ask for information in
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, with just over 400 queries. Over the
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 three months, the
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 still remained the most popular method of enquiry,
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 approximately 1000 queries. Meanwhile, the
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 of
enquires
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 made in
person
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 saw considerable growth to 800, surpassing the figures for
emails
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 and postal
enquires
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. From March to
June
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,
enquires
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 in
person
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 were the most common method of inquiry. By
June
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, the
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person
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enquires
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 soared by more than 1,000 to peak at 1,900. During
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 period, there was
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 a significant rise in the figure for
telephone
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 enquiries, from 1000 to 1600.
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, fewer people sent
emails
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 or letters to make
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, with slightly less than 400
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 in May and
June
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • in person
  • by letter/email
  • by telephone
  • general trend
  • six-month period
  • significant increase
  • steady rise
  • decline
  • peak
  • fluctuations
  • monthly data
  • comparison
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