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The charts below show the what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008

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The assigned bar graphs illustrate the comparison of
students
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 of UK graduates and postgraduates excluding full-time work in 2008. A cursory glance at the chart is enough to make it clear that the range of individuals continuing their
further
Linking Words
 education was maximum in the given time period. Talking about children undergoing graduation, the highest number of
students
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 were 29665 doing
a
Correct article usage
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further
Linking Words
 study
while
Linking Words
 excluding complete working hours.
On the other hand
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, 3500
students
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 were engaged as a volunteer which was the minimum frequency.
However
Linking Words
, 17775 were performing part-time jobs.
Similarly
Linking Words
, 16235 adults were unemployed.
While
Linking Words
 having the look at postgraduate college children, the excessive amount of youngsters continuing their study
were
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 2725 , followed by extra time workers at nearly 2535 in number.
While
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,
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 1625 were jobless and 345
students
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 were unpaid employers.
Overall
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 ,
it is clear that
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 the least figure of UK
students
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 was engaged in voluntary work.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Graduate
  • Postgraduate
  • Full-time work
  • Further education
  • Part-time work
  • Unemployment
  • Volunteering
  • Traveling
  • Gap year
  • Career progression
  • Job market
  • Transition
  • Academic life
  • Professional sphere
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Financial crisis
  • Long-term impact
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