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There is an increasing population on the planet, and people are running out of water, food, and shelter. To what consequences may overpopulation lead? In your opinion, what measures can be taken to fight overpopulation?

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The global population is increasing and essential supplies,
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 as water, food and accommodation are being used up. With the number of
people
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 inhabiting the planet to continue growing
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, insufficient resources
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 inevitable.
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, with optimal
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 over the speed of reproduction,
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 can be avoided. Overpopulation results in global scale disorder, with eatables being divided unequally (the wealthy being prioritized). When the number of inhabitants in an area reached
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a certain limit, distributed goods will not suffice the needs of the
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, so
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 be bought up by the rich. Assuming that there is something left for the poor, violence involving the
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 to obtain the goods is to be anticipated. Another point is that when there
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 too many
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, space will eventually be insufficient for all
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. Land and accommodation will become scarce when the residential complexes are not enough to supply
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 with proper shelter.
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 can be found in many megacities, where
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 have to live in cabins that are just enough for them to sleep.
Control
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 over the rate of birth is the crucial factor to prevent overpopulation. Laws restricting the number of newborns a family can get will give a government all the means to
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 a country’s population.
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, raising
people
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’s awareness about the financial risks of having too many children may help. With
people
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 now
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 about the predicted scenarios, it will make families consider thoroughly before deciding on having a new child. To conclude, overpopulation threatens global inhabitants with
shortage
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a shortage
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 of necessaries and cause large-scale chaos as a consequence.
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, with proper
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 over childbirth and the cooperation of citizens,
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 can be prevented.
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