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Many people say that they believe it is important to protect the environment but make no effort to do anything about it themselves.  Why do you think this is the case?  What action do you think individuals should take to protect the environment?

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More and more
people
 admit that protecting the
environment
 is essential, but they prefer to chant a slogan rather than make genuine efforts.
This
 may be due to individuals feeling powerless to make big changes, or even possibly just individual laziness. Regardless of the reason, there are some solutions to alleviate
this
 trend.
People
 think that protecting the
environment
 needs resources and costs which are unaffordable for individuals.
That is
 why
people
 count on governments and authorities to improve the
environment
,
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 since they pay a lot in taxes.
Moreover
, citizens claim that they are struggling to meet the ends and protecting the
environment
 has many complex processes that they do not have enough time to do, like
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 waste. To relieve
this
 situation, governments should raise the public’s awareness that everyone has the responsibility to protect the
environment
 and change their pattern of thinking that protecting the earth is not a massive task.
For instance
, if one person saves a bit of energy
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, the short amount of energy would be later than scientists’ prediction. Another way is to explain how to achieve these small things to protect the
environment
, like using visual materials to introduce the steps of selecting garbage and using high-tech AI to assist
people
 to put their waste in the right place. In conclusion, I reiterate my firm belief that individuals need to evolve from being armchair activists and be more pro-active in doing something themselves to protect the
environment
, no matter how small.
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