The population of many countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared to the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweighs the disadvantages.

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I am Suchaya Boonviriya from Thailand. I am writing to ask about opportunities for postgraduate study. I was awarded the Chulabhorn Royal Academy, College of Medical Science Scholarship in Commemoration of King Bhumibol Adulyadej’s 90th Birthday Anniversary. I intend to study for a PhD programme in the Faculty of Nursing, Midwifery & Palliative

Care

with Applied Technologies in Clinical

Care

area at the King’s College London under your guidance. I graduated with a bachelor 's degree in nursing science and experienced working in a Neurological Intensive

Care

Unit for 7 years. During

this

period I had done a master's degree in public

health

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occupational

health

and safety. I have conducted a master research thesis about the risk of breast cancer in rotating shift nurses and non-rotating shift nurses by studying melatonin, estrogen levels and other relative factors. Apart from experience in Thailand, I have worked in various healthcare areas

such

as aged

care

, private

care

, and medical equipment in Australia for 2.5 years.

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, with regard to recent working experience at Telehealth Cluster, Faculty of Medicine, Chulalongkorn University,I am aware of the importance of technology techniques

such

health

informatics (Big Data), machine learning , and AI to enhance

health

care

service. Thailand is still lacking expertise in

this

area.

Therefore

, I have a strong intention to deeply study modern technologies integrated into medical knowledge.

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also

is to bridge the gap of knowledge between medical and engineering toward improved

health

care

outcomes. Personally, I am interested in

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cerebral aneurysms,

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is because it is impossible to determine when the aneurysm might rupture. There will not be any signs or symptoms to alert the patient of the potential threat. But I strongly believe a huge amount of data could create prediction models and evaluations.

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would prevent some unsatisfactory outcomes which might affect the function.

However

, I can

also

do work on any topic just need your kind supervision and guidance. My CV and scholarship certification

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attached. I would be very grateful to you if you will examine it. In case of any query or

further

processing, feel free to contact me. Thank you very much for your time and consideration, and for any comments you could give me. I may request you to provide me with an opportunity to pursue my higher studies under your kind supervision.

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Some people think that the government should provide free education at every level. However, some say that individuals should pay for their university education. Discuss both of views and give your opinion

In the future ,we will havr more and more leisure time as machines replace many of the tasks we do at home amd at work.Discuss thr challenges and benefits this will bring