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Some people prefer to work in the same type of job throughout their lifetime while others like to change the type of job they do. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #work #type #job #lifetime #change
myself met
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many individuals in
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 world, and
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personally feel that it is very difficult to consider a
person
 as your favourite
person
 as
,
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 we as human beings keep on changing our opinion.
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one
 specific
person
 is my father, he is a farmer and as well as he is a hardworking
man
 . according to
me
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 no
one
 can work
like
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 my father. He is a very hardworking
man
 and kind-hearted and brave
person
,
Myself
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gain some significant experience of things from my
dad
 about how to be fearless and gutsy .He learnt me how to face any troubles in any circumstance So,I Personally admire him because not only has a father but
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 my role model.He learnt me funny stuff like how to swim and how to do fishing.he is my favourite
person
 because he faced a lot of problems because of my education . the morning I Woke up I saw
him
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how it
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 and
also
 he
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 so much because of our financial conditions.
Wheneverme
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 personally have a problem
myself
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make a call to him and talk to him which can be helped in many situations and
also
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 for a lot of problems which I was faced. myself met
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many individuals in
this
 world, and I have generally not enjoyed individuals I have met. I for
one
 feel that it is truly challenging to consider an individual as your number
one
 individual as, we as people continue to change our perspective.,
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However
one
 explicit individual is my
dad
, he is a rancher and as well as he is a dedicated
man
 . I never know anybody who is functioning
as
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 my
dad
. He is an exceptionally focused
man
 and
charitable
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 and daring individual,
Myself
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 gain some significant experience of things from my
dad
 about how to be fearless and gutsy. he learnt me
a great deal of
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a lot of
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 things like how to swim and how to confront any troubles in any circumstance why I Personally appreciate him on the grounds that has a
dad
 as well as the issues which he faces
as a result
 of my schooling from the morning I Woke up I saw him how it functioning and
furthermore
 he battle so much in view of our monetary circumstances. Whenever I have an issue I for
one
 settle on a decision to him and converse with him which might benefit from outside input by and large and
furthermore
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 for a ton of issues which I was confronted
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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