Some people prefer to work in the same type of job throughout their lifetime while others like to change the type of job they do. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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many individuals in
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personally feel that it is very difficult to consider a
person
as your favourite
person
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we as human beings keep on changing our opinion.
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specific
person
is my father, he is a farmer and as well as he is a hardworking
man
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no
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my father. He is a very hardworking
man
and kind-hearted and brave
person
,
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gain some significant experience of things from my
dad
about how to be fearless and gutsy .He learnt me how to face any troubles in any circumstance So,I Personally admire him because not only has a father but
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my role model.He learnt me funny stuff like how to swim and how to do fishing.he is my favourite
person
because he faced a lot of problems because of my education . the morning I Woke up I saw
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how it
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and
also
he
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so much because of our financial conditions.
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personally have a problem
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make a call to him and talk to him which can be helped in many situations and
also
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for a lot of problems which I was faced. myself met
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many individuals in
this
world, and I have generally not enjoyed individuals I have met. I for
one
feel that it is truly challenging to consider an individual as your number
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individual as, we as people continue to change our perspective.,
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However
one
explicit individual is my
dad
, he is a rancher and as well as he is a dedicated
man
. I never know anybody who is functioning
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my
dad
. He is an exceptionally focused
man
and
charitable
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and daring individual,
Myself
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gain some significant experience of things from my
dad
about how to be fearless and gutsy. he learnt me
a great deal of
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things like how to swim and how to confront any troubles in any circumstance why I Personally appreciate him on the grounds that has a
dad
as well as the issues which he faces
as a result
of my schooling from the morning I Woke up I saw him how it functioning and
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he battle so much in view of our monetary circumstances. Whenever I have an issue I for
one
settle on a decision to him and converse with him which might benefit from outside input by and large and
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for a ton of issues which I was confronted
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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