Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects . Other people think that , in today's world , subjects like Science and Technology are important than History . Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Most
people
think that
history
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really important for schools children subject.Many
people
opinion,
science
and
technology
are more important than
history
.I agree with the
first
point that I think
history
subject study must schools or university. I agree that everyone should study
history
subject.These days,more and more
people
are studying
history
While some
people
are of the opinion that
science
and
technology
are more useful and important than
history
.It is certainly false,that
science
and
technology
are not important to children or
people
.
Firstly
,every child and every person should know their
history
,their generations,how they lived and how they became famous in
science
and from that they must draw their own conclusions.,
Secondly
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some
people
think that the development of
technology
and
science
is good and they will benefit us well
That is
why so many
people
have become involved in
technology
,and even so many
people
have it upon themselves.But they do not know that the technologies they use are
also
history
.
Therefore
,I believe that
although
history
is very important to us and it should be mastered by all
people
in the world
,
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because our
history
is very rich.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial
  • comprehend
  • retrospect
  • gain insights
  • reflect on
  • sharpen
  • evaluate
  • significance
  • heritage
  • legacy
  • advent
  • breakthroughs
  • sustain
  • sustainability
  • revolutions
  • empowered
  • overcome
  • transform
  • advancements
  • collaboration
  • cooperation
  • diversity
  • fulfilling
  • promote
  • facilitate
  • prosperity
  • enhance
  • foster
  • foundation
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