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More and more people are choosing to eat ready-made meals rather than freshly cooked food. Does this trend have more advantages than disadvantages?

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Nowadays, the trend of consuming fast
food
 is significantly increased than
home cooked
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meal
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 in
this
 modern lifestyle. I think the demerits of ready-made meals are outweighed by the merits. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both advantages and disadvantages of
this
 trend. On the one hand, it is true that ready-made
food
are
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 convenient to eat and
time saving
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 for most
of
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the
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people.
This
 is because it can easily buy anywhere and any
time
 with good quality packaging and consumers are pleased to enjoy it on their busy working days. These days, the families of both parents have to do their job and they have no
time
 to shop the ingredients, prepare
food
, cook the meals and do the dishes.
Therefore
, eating ready to eat
food
 made people more comfortable
on
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 their daily life.
On the other hand
, there can be serious drawbacks
of
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 consuming fast
food
.
First
 and foremost, it contains unhealthy products and seasonings to addictive the people, so that consumers will want to buy their products again and again.
Secondly
, most
of
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fast
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food
 contains too much oil and a huge amount of sugar; it can lead to serious diseases
such
 as diabetes, obesity and heart problems.
Moreover
, ready to eat
food
 are made beforehand and it contains many chemicals for
fresh
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 and
keep
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 them longer.
Therefore
, consuming fast
food
everyday
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 can impact the customers with serious health problems. In conclusion, the only benefit of consuming ready to eat
food
 is
time saving
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 and
convenient
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 to eat, other than that,
this
 trend is obviously harmful to health issues of society.
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