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The key to solving environmental problems is simple: present generations must have a less comfortable life for the sake of future generation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is well known that our present
lifestyle
 has caused serious trouble for the
environment
.
That is
 why many
people
 suggest that we should give up our comfortable life so that
the
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future generations will be able to enjoy a better
environment
. Though I think
this
 suggestion is quite relevant, it is far from the best solution to environmental problems. To be sure, the
environment
 would be considerably improved if we chose to live a less comfortable life. As a matter of fact, our present
lifestyle
 is largely responsible for many environmental problems. As more and more cars find their way into households, the exhaust gas emissions from cars have become the major culprit in
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air pollution and even global warming.
The cheap
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 air travel has contributed a great deal to the consumption of nonrenewable energy.
In addition
, many
people
 like to use animal products, so they never hesitate to kill wild animals, resulting in the loss of species diversity and destruction of the ecological system. Needless to say, if we drove less,
traveled
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 less, and enjoyed less, our
environment
 would become much better. The issue is,
however
, that few
people
 would like to give up what they have already had. Once having been used to the conveniences of modern
lifestyle
, they may find it hard to go without them, even if for the sake of the
environment
.
Furthermore
, in most countries in the world, it would be too much to force
people
 to adopt the simpler lifestyles of their parents and grandparents. The key to solving environmental problems,
then
, does not lie in giving a mandatory order that
people
 must live a simpler and less comfortable life, but probably in developing new technologies. Environmentally-friendly alternative energy
such
 as solar energy ought to be widely used so that
people
 may continue their present
lifestyle
 but with little environmental impact.
Besides
, even with
people
 living
in
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the same
lifestyle
, the importance of environmental protection should be driven home to them.
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