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The pine charts illustrate the information about online selling in New Zealand according to four different categories travel, films/music, books, and clothes) in 2003 and 2013. Overall, the
sales
 of films/music and books saw a gradual increase during the 10 years
period
, while online shopping in the sectors of travel and clothes dropped slightly. Regrading those sectors who saw increases from 2003 to 2013, films/music started the
period
 at 21% and 10 years later it grew to 12% ending the
period
 at 33% and representing the biggest percentage in the online
sales
 in 2013. Books began in 2003 at 19% of
sales
 and in 2013 it rose to 22%.
In contrast
, the online
sales
 of travel were the biggest in 2003 at 36%,
however
, at the end of the
period
,
it
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they
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 dropped to 29%. Clothes started at 24% of the online
sales
 and it reduce 8% till 2013, representing 16% of the
sales
 in New Zealand till the end of the
period
 and being the smallest sale in 2013.
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