Many people now undertake extreme activities, from hang-gliding to mountain climbing. Why do people risk their lives in this way, and do you think this is a good trend?
In
this
modern era, extreme activities
are being popular as one of the choices for human
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being
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beings
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risk their lives signing up these
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for these
activities
as
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for
self satisfaction
. I do think Add a hyphen
self-satisfaction
this
is a good trend.
People
often look at extreme activities
as one of their goal
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goals
life
. As a matter of fact, we only live once , thats
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that's
people
risk their lives for this
. People
usually take up these type
of hobbies to entertain themselves. Making Fix the agreement mistake
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life
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. That might probably something
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activities
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phenomena
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phenomenon
which
is addictive.
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that
However
, periodically training is needed to join these activities
as they are life risking
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life-risking
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boosting
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the process
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the same
this
whole process. For example
, Kota Kinabalu mountain is a world heritage hiking area included with some extreme activities
.
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an earthquake
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leading to few casualties and mortality, there are still Fix the agreement mistake
earthquakes
people
eagerly signing up the
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Therefore
, I personally think that this
is a good trend. Signing up these
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for these
activities
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the courage
individual
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an individual
Self discipline
to train your body, improving your body metabolism leading to a more healthy Add a hyphen
Self-discipline
life
. Having a goal in life
is exciting. Making more friends by doing activities
can kill depression.
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conclusion
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