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İmmigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reasons of immigrations? To what consequenced can it lead?

#i̇mmigration #impact #society #immigrations
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The given line graph illustrates the findings of a survey on the various factors considered by people to shift from one capital city of a country to
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 2000 to 2015. Overall, it is observed from the line graph that the
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 of employment for moving to a new city is a major consideration, though it follows a declining trend. The
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, which follows an increasing trend. In the year 2000, employment started off at just over 60,000 increasing steadily to 85000 in the year 2005.
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, from 2010 to 2015 there was a gradual decline to just under 90000. During the same period, the
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 of study
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 showed a similar trajectory, increasing linearly upwards to 48000 in 2005 from 25000 in 2000, more than doubling but
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 from 2010 to
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 it increased significantly, equalling employment in 2015.
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, adventure was the least cited
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 for people to move, remaining almost constant from 2000 to 2015 at slightly over 10000.
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, the
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 of personal
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such
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 as family and friends witnessed a peak in 2010 at over 2000, from there on it remained stable at over 2000 till 2015.
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