İmmigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reasons of immigrations? To what consequenced can it lead?

The given line graph illustrates the findings of a survey on the various factors considered by people to shift from one capital city of a country to
an
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another between the
year
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2000 to 2015. Overall, it is observed from the line graph that the
reason
of employment for moving to a new city is a major consideration, though it follows a declining trend. The
second
most
reason
is study
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, which follows an increasing trend. In the year 2000, employment started off at just over 60,000 increasing steadily to 85000 in the year 2005.
However
, from 2010 to 2015 there was a gradual decline to just under 90000. During the same period, the
reason
of study
also
showed a similar trajectory, increasing linearly upwards to 48000 in 2005 from 25000 in 2000, more than doubling but
then
from 2010 to
2015
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it increased significantly, equalling employment in 2015.
On the other hand
, adventure was the least cited
reason
for people to move, remaining almost constant from 2000 to 2015 at slightly over 10000.
Similarly
, the
reason
of personal
relationship
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such
as family and friends witnessed a peak in 2010 at over 2000, from there on it remained stable at over 2000 till 2015.
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