Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

In recent years,few
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keen on being entrepreneurs, rather than being a
company
's
worker
or employee. Due to lots of pressures and less safety for workers . And
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drawback might be
shortage
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a shortage
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of skilful
worker's
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workers
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. On the
one
hand , there is a wide range of causes to be an entrepreneur .
First
of all, working in an
organisation
is huge pressure on
a
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labour . Take an example , a
service man
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must be present on time in the workplace , which has not considered any personal or family problem of
employee
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the employee
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.
Secondly
, staff's
are not get
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a respectable salary for their hard work .
Finally
, less of
sequrity
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security
for women
such
as , female
worker
do not get proper respect and safety from male
worker
which is the biggest problem to move from
company
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the company
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. And encourage them to be self-employed.
On the other hand
, there are some demerits behind
this
.
Firstly
, if there
are
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everyone want to be a
company
's owner ,
one
day they will not find qualified
worker
which is essential for an
organisation
to be succeeded.
Moreover
,
every
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one
do
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not have enough knowledge and capacity for being a
company
founder .
As a result
,they might be
lossed
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loss
in business . To sum up , to be a successful
business man
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businessman
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people should have diverse of
quality's
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qualities
quality
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like problem-solving skill .
Concequetly
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Consequently
, they might be
loser
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losers
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and unemployed In
the
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society. And if all people want to be
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the owner
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owner
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owners
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so who will be labour to continue the
organisation
. And people will not respect
one
another as everyone will get the power of the owner of
organisation's
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organisations
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • company
  • organization
  • freedom
  • independence
  • income potential
  • flexibility
  • working hours
  • working location
  • passions
  • interests
  • decision-making
  • business practices
  • disadvantages
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