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Some claim that studying abroad has greater benefits for a student’s home country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#student’s #home #country
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It is weened by many people that
students
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 with foreign
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 are like an asset for their
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nation
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 as they may bring many
benefits
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 to their
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nations
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. I vehemently espouse that
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 is true that studying abroad has many merits for student’s
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country
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 because
students
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 can give their
expert
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 service to their
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nations
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 and they may encourage others
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 study abroad for better
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. As these points require prudent elaboration, let us delve deeper into them with pertinent examples in the impending paragraphs.
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 with, a large number
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 are in favour of
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benefits
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 for their own
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 who studying abroad which can never be undermined.
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 and foremost, after finishing their
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 in foreign countries,
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 may start their career in their own
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 to provide
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 services there. To elaborate, because
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 with foreign
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 have an attachment with their own
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 and families there, they
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 likely to reside near to them and to start their career in their own countries.
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, not only
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 thinking of
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 with foreign
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give
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 a chance to live near to their families, but they may
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 increase the economic growth of their
nation
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 by implementing their international knowledge in a distinctive manner. To cite an example,
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 Katharine Viner, the editor-in-chief of The Guardian newspaper, in her editorial ‘Pragmatic effects of foreign
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’ in March
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 2015 clearly unveiled that many
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 had received
expert
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 international services from their
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 with foreign
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 when these
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 started their career in their own
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.
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, studying abroad can be very effective for
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 own
nations
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 in order to encourage other
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 for international
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. To substantiate, after finishing
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 in foreign countries,
students
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 may give free coaching to other
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 of their own
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 and they may motivate them to study in foreign due to advanced level of knowledge. As a consequence, no sooner do
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 start coaching
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other
students
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 in their own
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 than other
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 may get
scholorships
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scholarships
 for study abroad and
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 may decrease the cost of other
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 to get foreign
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. To exemplify,
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painstaking research conducted by Oxford University, over a group of 1500
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, age ranging from 20 to 30 years, in May
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 2017 , manifestly revealed that 85% of them accepted that they joined foreign
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 when they were encouraged to do by old
students
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 with foreign
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 of their own
nation
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. To encapsulate, it can unequivocally be concluded that
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 with foreign
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 have
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of
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benefits
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 for their
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nation
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 who may
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be
 considered as the real asset for their
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. I strongly agree with the
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 carried by
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 to their
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country
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 since they may impart their
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 service in
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nation
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 and they can incentivize others to get international
studies
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