Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss these views and give your own opinion.

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noone
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no one
knows what actually want to do. Some people spend their whole career as employees of the same
company
, while others think
that is
more effective to change working environments. In my opinion, the
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view is a better option and in
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I am going to analyse both views and my opinion. Working for a specific
company
for your whole working life has advantages and disadvantages as well.
Firstly
, people that get stuck to the
first
organisation they worked for is because they familiarise with that
job
. They get to know the responsibilities and the things that
company
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needs really well so they commit themselves to it.
Moreover
, doing the same thing
everyday
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they end up being experts in that position, but they
also
are in danger of losing motivation. Being an expert in a specific
job
position makes it harder to progress and that consequences to making your whole life monotonized.
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the other hand, when people change
job
environments,
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job
positions give them the chance to get to know themselves better, what they like most and what they want to do, set goals and be more ambitious. Gaining experience from different organisations
also
makes you more confident, while at the same time you built a highly strong CV. Once you gain that experience you have
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the capacity to be more flexible and adjust yourself and your abilities to new and more demanding situations.
Nonetheless
, changing often jobs makes the new
company
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more time to get to know you and your capabilities better. To sum up, changing environment is a stressful situation but
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the end gives you more positive things and the most important thing is that in order to progress you have to change!
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  • Corporate ladder
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  • Comfort zone
  • Professional network
  • Diverse skill set
  • Industry exposure
  • Innovation
  • Resilience
  • Seniority
  • Job market
  • Career trajectory
  • Company culture
  • Professional growth
  • Job security
  • Promotion prospects
  • Cross-functional experience
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