Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past 30 years that many cities in the world are now one big traffic jam. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can government take to discourage people from using their cars?

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last
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, the number of people owning a
car
has so dramatically increased that many cities are facing
traffic
problems and the word is described as 'one big
traffic
jam'. In my opinion, it is true that
currently
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we are having trouble with so many vehicles on the roads, but what
government
can do to reduce the use of so many cars? Many cities, especially the big ones, like London, suffer from congestion
in
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its
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roads, even though many people use
the
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public
transport
it seems that many drivers still use their own cars. As long as someone
go
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for a walk
at
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the city centre can understand that. Surprisingly,
for example
from my
apartment
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I can go to the city centre within 20 minutes by walk, but by
bus
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it will still take the same time! That happened because of the
traffic
that the roads have. There is no doubt that except
from
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their
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environmental effect that all
this
traffic
jam has,
also
people are nervous for always spending that much time on their
transport
and
government
should take some measurements about it. It is obvious that the congestion charge for entering to the centre, the rise in petrol cost and the expensive
car
insurance have not
discourage
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the drivers, so maybe it would be efficient if the
government
invest
on
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public
transport
. More lines, even
more
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frequent schedules, to renovate the underground to make it bigger, more spacious, cleaner.
Moreover
, the fee ticket should decrease to be affordable and to create cheaper monthly bundles for cheaper
transport
. To sum up, it is undeniable that everyone
prefer
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to move
with
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its
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their
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own
car
, but for the daily moves should
government
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make more appealing
the
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public
transport
and that will be achieved if the monthly expenses will be much
more
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less than moving with your own
car
and by having at least a bus stop within 3 to 5 minutes walk from your apartment.
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