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In some countries, there is not enough recycling of waste materials. What are the reasons and some potential solutions?

#countries #waste #materials
Many argue that country in around the
world
do
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 not provide to change the waste materials to be a useful thing. There are many
problem
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 to save the
world
 from waste. Some people believe that
modern
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 era has
retrict
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restrict
 problem
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 that. We can start from
this
explanation
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 what the reasons the following:
First
 of all, some countries
have
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 not
a
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enough technology to reduce
this
 waste.
For instance
, in
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developing country, they cannot do more because they
have
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 not enough money and materials,
moreover
media
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 to do it. But in
modern
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country
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 it is very easy to do.
Second
 of all,
habit
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 of
human
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 in
this
 era is just
think
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 about technology to make something easy to get not about
future
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situation
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. If
this
 condition persists, our
world
 will be
broke
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 consistently.
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, human behaviour of people that using
a
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 air conditioner
everyday
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. That situation
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affect
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effect
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to
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the
world
 is called global warming. There are solutions to make
better
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world
 with
change
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 our
habit
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 to more realise
about
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the condition of our
world
 with do a movement to reduce
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 of air condition, a straw, and keep
environment
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the environment
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 clean. It is
very
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essensial
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essential
 action and will give
impact
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to
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 our
live
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 in the future.
Besides
, you do not make
a
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rubbish of your food because it can make rubbish of household increase.
Moreover
, we know if people in
this
 era are very busy,
that is
 why they do not care about that. But with the feeling of care
your
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world
, I guess all the
action
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 can make
better
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a better
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world
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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