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Every year several languages die out, Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, there are many different kinds of
languages
 that people are using
them
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, but it can be said that there are a few
languages
 that are incredibly popular than others. If people are connecting by
one
language
, the living will become more convenient and comfortable. In
this
 is
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, I will delineate
this
 notion and
then
 come up with an opinion. There are many spoken and written
languages
, and each of them can relate to
a
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culture.
Although
 there are many
languages
 have become extinct,
the
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 cultures of them have not disappeared. I support the view ,which was said, that there is no serious connection between society and its
language
 whom citizens speak.
Moreover
, they can speak any
language
,
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 and can preserve their identifications simultaneously.
Besides
, there are many benefits
behind
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 communicating with
one
 tongue globally.
For example
, it can establish sound relationships among societies.
From
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 the other side, learning
languages
 at schools consumes
many
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 time that could
be reorient
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 to other subjects. I believe that to learn a new
language
, you should spend a huge effort, while you can easily focus on more important courses,
for example
, math, history, etc. The advancement of sciences
force
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 us to look after other issues. For that reason, schools should be guided by more effective educational systems toward sciences rather than linguistic studies. In
conclusion
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 human civilizations can be related to the way that they selected to communicate with each other, according to some people especially
who
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those who
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 study history and literature. I can see that using
one
 way to write and to speak, which is valid for
one
 grammatical reference, can be more beneficial to humankind.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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