In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. what do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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The average weight of
people
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in some part of the world is increasing
as a result
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their health and
fitness
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level decreased. In the following paragraph,
causes
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the causes
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and solutions of
this
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issue will be discussed and outlined in
details
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detail
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.
Firstly
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, the main reason for
people
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to gain weight is
food
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. More
people
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consume unhealthy
food
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such
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as
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a burger
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burger
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burgers
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or fried chicken as it is easily accessible
comparing
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to
other type
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another type
other types
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of
food
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. Regarding
to
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the modern lifestyle,
people
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are having a
limit
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time
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for relaxing in one day as they are spending more than 8 hours
in
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apply
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working
their
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on their
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career
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careers
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.
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,
people
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who have a
full
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full-time
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time
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job
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jobs
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are rushing to
working
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work
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at
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in
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early
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the early
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morning. They usually buy some fast
food
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for their breakfast as it is easy and quick.
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, these
people
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have less
time
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for exercise as they prefer to rest
on
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in
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their free
time
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. According to these bad habits, it can surely cause a
decreasing
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decrease
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of
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in
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health and
fitness
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level of
people
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. To tackle these problems,
people
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should have more selection and more
accesible
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accessible
to healthy
food
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.
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, fast
food
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restaurant
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restaurants
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should
also
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provide an option for healthy
food
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to support
customer
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customers
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who would like to have clean
food
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for their meal.
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, to improve
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people
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people's
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fitness
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lifestyle, it would be a good idea for
office
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an office
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building to have a
fitness
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room in order to encourage
people
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to do more
excercise
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exercise
as they do not need to travel to the
sport
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club or pay for
expensive
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an expensive
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fitness
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membership. According to the causes and solutions discussed above, it can be concluded that the problem of the increasing of average weight can cause bad health level, and it should be solved encouraging
people
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to eat
healtier
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healthier
food
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and do more
excercise
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exercise
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • physical activity
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • exercise
  • unhealthy diet
  • fast food
  • urbanization
  • modernization
  • stress
  • awareness
  • education
  • government intervention
  • policies
  • promotion
  • sports
  • fitness programs
  • health education
  • taxation
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure
  • parks
  • recreational spaces
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