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Some people think that it is the responsibility of governments to take care of the environment, while others believe that it is the responsibility of people to take care of the environment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Enviroment
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Environment
 is the most essential part of all living organisms on the Earth.
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, a large bunch of
people
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 tries to blame the
goverment
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government
 for
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, while other blame themselves. In my opinion, one should take
responsibilty
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responsibility
 to save the
enviroment
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environment
, along with the norms prepared by the govt. to help our Eco-system.
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disccuss
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discuss
 both
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views.
General
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The general
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 public is the one who
interact
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 with
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nature most, it is
there
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 duty to save the environment
large
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a large
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 number of
people
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 prefer personal vehicle over
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public transport is the main reason for the nature destruction from
green houses
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greenhouses
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 gases apart from
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 peoples should
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 motivate and help other to spread awareness about moving to buy biodegradable or paper bags rather than plastic bags.
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 government play please a significant role in protecting the Eco-system as it should try to switch to Eco-friendly infrastructure by imposing
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a ban
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 on all
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plastic products, and
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 providing sanctions for environmental projects which will encourage the development of
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 infrastructure as well as spread awareness among the
people
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Government
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The government
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also
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 need to encourage
people
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 by giving appropriate reward to help to save the environment in any possible way. In conclusion,
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 the government does play an important
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part
in
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in the environment
but
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it is our
individual
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individuals
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 who
need
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 to step up for the task.
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