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For many, shopping malls are great places to spend their leisure time and meet others. People, however, in the past mostly visited those when necessary. To what extent do you think this is a negative trend? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Today,
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 is a
trend
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 to go to shopping centres to utilize their free
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 or to meet someone while it was not a common thing in a past era. I believe that there is nothing wrong with
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trend
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 and will shed light on the reasons related to
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trend
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To begin
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 with, shopping
malls
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 provide citizens with a great atmosphere with different sections
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 as gym, spa, games and cinema. So it is the best idea to go there to use their free
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.
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,
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 is not only a place where
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 can get out from their daily stress but
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 spend some memorable
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 with their loved ones.
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, a survey conducted by the University of British Columbia on the 100
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 from different countries states that there are 80% of
people
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 in the world like to go to the cinema on a weekend to use their leisure
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 and it is a helpful activity for them.
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, Shopping
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 provide
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 with a feeling of security because whenever, couples or friends meet each other in public places
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 as parks , on the roads. they feel insecure because there are many cases in India where the couple got arrested just because they were talking to each other on the road.
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, that couple was not against the law but they had to pay a fine.
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, shopping
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 are covered with surveillance cameras, security guards and other enjoyable activities, where
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 can go and spend their
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 without any interruptions.
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, An article written by Mr Benjamin Bradlee in 2016 stated that
people
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 feel more secure about their personal life in shopping
malls
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 as compared to parks or roads. To conclude, most
people
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 want a secure place to enjoy
time
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 with their family or friends and these shopping
malls
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 provides them with just that. I believe that
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 is a good
trend
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 as compared to our past era.
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