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For many, shopping malls are great places to spend their leisure time and meet others. People, however, in the past mostly visited those when necessary. To what extent do you think this is a negative trend? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Today,
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 is a
trend
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 to go to shopping centres to
utilize
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utilise
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 their free
time
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 or to meet
someone
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someone,
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while
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 it was not a common thing in
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the
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 past era. I believe that there is nothing wrong with
this
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trend
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and
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, and
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 will shed light on the reasons related to
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trend
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To begin
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 with, shopping
malls
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 provide citizens with a great atmosphere with different sections
such
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 as
gym
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a gym
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,
spa
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a spa
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, games and
cinema
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a cinema
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. So it is the best idea to go there to use their free
time
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.
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,
this
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 is not only a place where
people
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 can get out from their daily stress but
also
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 spend some memorable
time
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 with their loved ones.
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, a survey conducted by the University of British Columbia on
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100
people
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 from different countries states that there are 80% of
people
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 in the world like to go to the cinema on a weekend to use their leisure
time
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and
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 it is a helpful activity for them.
On the other hand
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, Shopping
malls
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 provide
people
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 with a feeling of security because whenever
,
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 couples or friends meet each other in public places
such
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 as parks , on the roads.
they
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They
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 feel insecure because there are many cases in India where the couple got arrested just because they were talking to each other on the road.
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, that couple was not against the law
but
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 they had to pay a fine.
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, shopping
malls
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 are covered with surveillance cameras, security guards and other enjoyable activities, where
people
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 can go and spend their
time
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 without any interruptions.
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,
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 article written by Mr Benjamin Bradlee in 2016 stated that
people
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 feel more secure about their personal life in shopping
malls
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 as compared to parks or roads.
To conclude
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, most
people
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 want a secure place to enjoy
time
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 with their family or friends
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, and
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 these shopping
malls
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provides
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 them with just that. I believe that
this
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 is a good
trend
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as
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compared to our past era.

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task
Answer the prompt by showing how far you think the trend is negative or positive, and give a clear view in the first or last line.
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