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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectaction of job satisfaction for all workers?

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The majority of the population spend most of their adulthood working,
therefore
job
satisfaction
 is fundamental for individual wellbeing.
This
 essay aims to enumerate the most important factors that contribute to
job
satisfaction
 and to explain why the idea that everyone can be satisfied with their
job
 is utopic. There are 2 main factors that help to achieve
job
satisfaction
.
Firstly
, the worker needs to feel that he is contributing to the company and society.
This
 is because
otherwise
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,otherwise
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 they would think that they are useless and they would be stressed thinking they can be fired at any
time
.
For example
, firefighters are among the most satisfied with their jobs because people consider them to be heroes.
Secondly
, workers spend several hours in their working place and
thus
, a good work environment is extremely important.
For instance
, if employees were forced to accomplish goals that are very difficult they would be negatively affected.
Although
 it is always a good idea to improve
job
satisfaction
, achieving that on all employees is utterly impossible because every person is different and has different necessities that change over
time
. It is certainly true that it could be achievable in a small group of people for a limited
time
, but is not possible to do that in a different environment
such
 as a big company. To sum up, the most important factors that contribute to
job
satisfaction
 are the necessity of the worker of feeling useful and a good working environment.
Additionally
, it is only possible to achieve
job
satisfaction
 an all workers on a small scale and for a period of
time
,
therefore
 full
job
satisfaction
 for all workers is unachievable.
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