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CCTV cameras are a common sight in town centres, on public transport and outside many businesses. They not only help identify and apprehend criminals but also serve as a crime deterrent. However, some people believe that they are intrusive and constitute a breach of privacy. What do you feel is more important, personal privacy or public safety?

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Nowadays ,
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 for a variety of reasons. It seems to bring many benefits to individuals and the community. If
people
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 do the wrong way that it could be effective of personal privacy to some extent while I still agree that using CCTV
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 are more necessary in public areas to deter violations and crime. It is true that some
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 take advantage of
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 to do worse purposes like snapping or taking videos to citizens without acceptance.
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 , some pervert men could have a breach of peace with another via cell phones or
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. That makes
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 feel annoyed and intrusive in their privacy.
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 , I suppose CCTV
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 are more crucial and beneficial to society. In terms of the police investigation , they assist police to identify and catch criminals to provide compelling evidence at the crime scene leading to reducing criminal status in the community areas.
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, governments significantly decrease patrols on public transport , streets, other places .
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 means states could save as much as possible in labour resources and money that the government use in another field.
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 , businesses could control and observe their properties.
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, employees can operate their tasks when they have a business trip. In conclusion, CCTV
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 are a part of life in modern life for individuals and governments. it's just one thing , the government should establish security regulations regarding private and public with
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 who use the camera.
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