In many Countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified. Do you agree or disagree?

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in the world
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,
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plenty of countries
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established
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to stop smoking in
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place
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. In my opinion, I firmly agree that
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because using cigarettes impact
people
who are close to them or teenage behaviour and cause health issues.
First
of all,
smoking
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profile might influence younger’s behaviours. As
people
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place
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,
such
as parks, outside schools and bus stops, countless children will access
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there easily, when the children saw it, they will want to know what it is and how it is taste like, so that will
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effect
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them to try.
For instance
, a lot of my friends and I started to interested in smoking was when we saw
people
smoking in the park.
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,
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behaviours will be
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impacted
by smokers.
In addition
, smoking brings illness to
people
. Nowadays, wide of range of ages
people
are smoking for
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, and some has already been smoking for many years, but the cigarettes including bad
ingredience
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ingredients
ingredient
which is nicotine, it breaks
people
’s lungs and make it become
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, and if you smoke more longer it will
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terrible illness which is cancers to you.
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,
people
are smoking tobacco
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every where
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that impact
people
who are nearby them
such
as children and inhale their
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smoking,
it
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is more badly affect to person.
Therefore
, smoking not only put yourself in danger
also
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. To sum up, in the
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pass
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,
people
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to smoke
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tobacco
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, indicating that inside
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restaurant
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or entertainment
place
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, it is a bad influence
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younagers
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youngsters
younger
youngers
to elders. So, I strongly agree that not allow
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a cigarette
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cigarette
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in
public
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place
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondhand smoke
  • prevalence
  • respiratory issues
  • environmental pollution
  • litter
  • healthcare costs
  • smoking-induced illnesses
  • encourage smokers to quit
  • public health improvement
  • justified
  • public spaces
  • exposure
  • non-smokers
  • inconvenience
  • younger populations
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