In many Countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified. Do you agree or disagree?
Since smoking
is commonly
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commonly seems
seem
in the world Correct your spelling
seen
in
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apply
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everywhere
every where
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everywhere
,
plenty of countries Remove the comma
apply
are
established Change the verb form
is
rule
to stop smoking in Fix the agreement mistake
rules
public
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a public
place
. In my opinion, I firmly agree thatFix the agreement mistake
places
,
because using cigarettes impact Remove the comma
apply
people
who are close to them or teenage behaviour and cause health issues.
First
of all, smoking
profile might influence younger’s behaviours. As Add an article
the smoking
a smoking
people
smoke in public
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a public
place
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places
such
as parks, outside schools and bus stops, countless children will access to
there easily, when the children saw it, they will want to know what it is and how it is taste like, so that will Change preposition
apply
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affect
effect
them to try. Correct your spelling
affect
For instance
, a lot of my friends and I started to interested in smoking was when we saw people
smoking in the park. Thus
, teenager’s
behaviours will be Fix the agreement mistake
teenagers’
impected
by smokers.
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impacted
In addition
, smoking brings illness to people
. Nowadays, wide of range of ages people
are smoking for relax
, and some has already been smoking for many years, but the cigarettes including bad Change the verb form
relaxing
ingredience
which is nicotine, it breaks Correct your spelling
ingredients
ingredient
people
’s lungs and make it become weakness
, and if you smoke more longer it will Add an article
a weakness
brings
terrible illness which is cancers to you. Change the verb form
bring
Moreover
, people
are smoking tobacco Correct your spelling
everywhere
every where
that impact Correct your spelling
everywhere
people
who are nearby them such
as children and inhale their second hand
smoking, Add a hyphen
second-hand
it
is more badly affect to person. Correct pronoun usage
which
Therefore
, smoking not only put yourself in danger also
effect other person
.
To sum up, in the Change the wording
another person
other people
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past
pass
, Correct your spelling
past
people
allows
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allow
to smoke
tobacco Change the verb form
smoking
in
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apply
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everywhere
every where
, indicating that inside Correct your spelling
everywhere
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a restaurant
restaurant
or entertainment Fix the agreement mistake
restaurants
place
, it is a bad influence Fix the agreement mistake
places
to
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on
younagers
to elders. So, I strongly agree that not allow Correct your spelling
youngsters
younger
youngers
to have
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having
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a cigarette
cigarette
in Fix the agreement mistake
cigarettes
public
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a public
place
.Fix the agreement mistake
places
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