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Do good exam results at school or college guarantee success in life? discuss. Do believe that is studying hard will being better life?

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Receiving high scores in
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 realm has always been appreciated while
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 display some virtues it cannot ensure prosperity.Both sides are elaborated on in my essay. On one hand, some dire consequences of just focusing on achieving high
marks
 must be uttered.
firstly
, sometimes scores are not real if pupils just concentrate on Mark could either cheat or memorize. so it is not terminating into success. another dire consequence has to do with being
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from
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 other aspects of
life
.In many cases, are not able to allocate time and energy on social or personal dimensions. Some top learners, as a vivid case, are only good at studying they become
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 and messy.
On the other hand
, privileges of being perfect at tests cannot be overlooked
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the most highlighted belongs to diligence. Being hard-working, learners how to manage the other part of
life
. Being a hard worker,
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the trainee
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trainee
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 would learn how to cope with other hardships in
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life
, and try to find
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a remedy
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.One of the reasons behind it is about self-confidence when a student has always been marked highly, maybe they accomplishment in
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 of
life
. Another
marks
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 merit of being good at exams is about
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enhancing self-image and self-confidence and when a student receives high
marks
 frequently, others including teachers and classmates look up at him. It leads to make him having
better
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a better
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 attitude of himself and get more achievements. To recapitulate what was uttered above, I believe that
although
 receiving
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 score at circular can be by memorizing or even is stops one form other views, by improving self-esteem and teaching hard-working could help
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successful
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