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Some people believe governments should spend money in saving the languages of a few speakers from dying out completely. Others think this is a waste of financial resources. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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We live in a linguistically diverse world.
However
, there are several minority
languages
 on the verge of extinction. While some people feel the government should fund the survival of these indigenous
languages
, others are against
this
 notion.
This
 essay will discuss both views and why we should conserve these
languages
. I believe it is essential for the government to safeguard
languages
.
Language
 is the glue to culture and education. With
language
, you are home anywhere in the world.
Language
 binds the community together. With the loss of
language
, there is a loss of culture and identity. Many indigenous
languages
 are going extinct,
for example
, Sanskrit, Maori
language
, and Irish. Many attempts were made to conserve these
languages
, including allocating older adults who can speak fluently in the minority
language
 and placing them in kindergartens to teach children and preserve their
language
.
On the contrary
, plenty of youth nowadays is learning English as the primary
language
 of the internet.
Hence
, having one common
language
 is the aim of particular groups of people who prefer the government not to waste money preserving rare
languages
. With globalisation, youngsters believe forgetting their native
language
 is a sign of progression.
Furthermore
, the money used to save these
languages
 can be used in healthcare, education or innovation. In conclusion, I firmly believe
languages
 should be saved to safeguard the culture of our ancestors. In my opinion, the finances used to safe
languages
 are indeed an investment and not a waste.
Submitted by Jane on

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