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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious problems as well as practical problems. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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Residing in a state where you have to talk a different
language
 from yours can create problems even practically. I agree to a greater extent with
this
 topic. So in
this
 essay, I will be talking about why I agree. Learning how to speak a foreign
language
 takes passion, time and dedication. Some people are naturally born for
this
 kind of
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. They catch the
language
 faster than others. For those who struggle to learn, it can create difficulties for them like not being able to socialize with other individuals. They tend to keep to themselves which in many instances can cause stress and depression. Not being able to communicate with others because of
language
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 barrier can
also
 lead to withdrawal from
partipating
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participating
 in activities with friends or colleagues. There are certain games that
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 one to be familiar with the
language
 spoken there which may
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 make one
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not participate. Some persons will end up making mistakes simply because they did not understand an order that was given in a
language
 they do not understand. Several people misinterpret what was said which may lead to accidents and even fights. There are jobs like being a waitress or waiter where you have to take orders from customers. If you do not understand the
language
 you can
easlily
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easily
 take
wrong
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 orders and create problems for yourself.
Although
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 agree with the statement, I
also
 believe that where there is a will there is a way. Toddlers who cannot even talk somehow find ways to communicate and can spend the whole
days
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 playing together without understanding each other. I
also
 think with adults it can be the same. If push comes to shove, sign
language
 can be used for better communication. In
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 I think if you are in a foreign land, learning their
language
 is essential not only for your good but for everyone's sake.
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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