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Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. Shat problem can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

#people #difficulties #shat #lack
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The charts represent the number of British students who can speak any
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 other than English at one university in England in the year
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2000 and 2010. Overall, it is obvious that the amount of multilingual students is increased.
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, Spanish is the most popular
second
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language
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 whereas German is the least popular one each year. From 2000 to 2010, the number of pupils who can speak french is dropped by 5% from 15 to 15
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on the contrary
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, the Spanish speaker group rose the exact percentage from 30 to 35%. German
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 group remained the same at each year with 10%. Meanwhile, for the group consisting of a
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 other than Spanish, German and French jumped by 5% and reached 20% while students who can only speak English dropped to half of the previous percentage and reached 10%. One final point is that pupils who know more than 1 other
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 increased about 5% respectively.
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