Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that unsalaried volunteer work like charity, sports lectures and taking care of the immediate surroundings ought to be made mandatory in
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essay. Admittedly, there are some basic benefits of undertaking volunteer unpaid jobs in college. One of which is that it makes the youngsters responsible.
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, the students are able to think of others rather than themselves as they take responsibility for other people's needs.
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, in the UK, a lot of college undergraduates are taking up care work because it enables these youngsters to support others and give them a sense of worth.
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, the young adults could attend, support, and be empathetic to other people's needs
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, despite the minor benefits associated with youngsters engaging in compulsory voluntary activities without pay, I believe that making community support compulsory is detrimental to the youth. One major problem is that it leads to distraction. The students will lose focus on their studies.
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, they get distracted and are not able to attend to their coursework effectively.
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the voluntary job rather than their courses. These courses would assist them in the future to acquire profitable employment.
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, my neighbour's son, James, had to repeat his Senior Secondary School Examination because he volunteered to work for a Non-Governmental Organization, which took most of his study time and as
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he failed three critical subjects. In conclusion, despite the minor upside associated with doing unsalaried volunteer employment, I strongly disagree that it should be part of the school's courses as it can lead to distraction.
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, the relevant authorities should make it not mandatory for high schools.
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