Some people say that advertisment make us buy things we do not really need some other says advertisement tell us about many new products that can improve our daily life

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In today’s world

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isememt influences people to buy new things advertising is

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best way to introduce

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new

produce

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product

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for improving daily lifestyle. Here I personally, discuss

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I think

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influenced us to buy things,

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we do not really need. Now I give my opinion.

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is beneficial for consumers and companies, but sometimes the

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is fake. T.v commercial gives

wrong

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the wrong

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information.

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- online apps like Ajio give a

discount

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on babies cloth, but they cut the amount from cards

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rupees,

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however

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they are mentioned

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the

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gives information about brands. In

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situation, brands discounts are helpful for people to purchase new things because brands

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provide good services. But there us only big business afford new products.

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Adidas gives a 60%

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on daily wear.these do not fake. In conclusion

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aware information about products. I can say that people's responsibilities they should buy the product according to their need.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 5.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

165 words

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Some people say that advertisment make us buy things we do not really need some other says advertisement tell us about many new products that can improve our daily life

Your opinion

In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Cycling has many benefits, yet in some countries , there is a decrease in the number of people using bicycles as their main form of transportation . Why is it happening? Give suggestions on how to encourage people to use bicycles again.

Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives?

You have a problem with a neighbour. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter -describe the problem -say how long it has been a problem -explain what action you want the neighbour to take