The charts below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range of the years 1990 and 2010.

The charts below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range of the years 1990 and 2010.
The chart illustrates the proportion of the UK population in different
age
groups
providing money to charity in both 1990 and 2010.
Overall
, the most percentage of having given money to charity was the middle
age
group
that
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ages
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between 36 and 50 in 1990,
while
the older
age
group
that
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between 51 and 65 provided the most financial in 2010. In the first three
age
groups
, the percentage
was
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sharply decreased.
However
, in the
last
two
age
groups
, there
were
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a slightly increased in proportions.
According to
the first three
age
groups
including
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the range of ages between 18 and 25,26 to 35 and 36 to 50. Focusing on the first
age
group
, there was a dramatic drop from about upper 15% to more than 5%.
Secondly
,
in
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the
age
between 26 and 35, there was a decline from over 30% to under 25%.
Finally
, the middle
age
group
made the highest percentage, there was a bit fall from about 42% to 35%. All three
groups
were changed in 1990 and the
next
ten years.
On the other hand
, the
last
two
age
groups
were
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gradually rose from 35% to just under 40% and from about 32% to 35, respectively.
Therefore
, it is obvious that all
age
groups
expressed different trends in both 1990 and 2010.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.

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