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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart illustrates the information about how the
percentage
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 of people eating sodium, saturated fat and added sugar in
breakfast
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,
lunch
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,
dinner
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 and
snacks
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 in the USA.
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,
it is clear that
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dinner
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 has the most
percentage
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 of sodium and saturated fat
while
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snacks
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 have the most
percentage
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 of added sugar. Meanwhile,
breakfast
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 has the least
percentage
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 of
three
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 types of nutrients. In sodium, the portion of
dinner
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 accounts for 43% which is the highest rate in all nutrients.
Lunch
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 represents 29% which is almost double in both
snacks
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 and
breakfast
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 at 14%. In saturated fat, the highest typical meal is
dinner
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make
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 up 37% and the
second
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-highest meal is
lunch
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 which stands at 26%.
Snacks
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 and
breakfast
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 occupy
at
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21% and 16%, respectively. In added sugar,
snacks
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 get the highest
percentage
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, 42% which is almost half of the nutrient. The remaining meals,
breakfast
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,
lunch
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 and
dinner
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 make up 16%, 19% and 23%, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, breakfast, lunch, dinner, snacks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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