Reading books keeps a person’s mind active, whereas watching films and television is passive and does not require a person to use their imagination. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Books
are a man's best friend. Reading
books
helps to develop one's thinking capacity and intellectual. I completely agree with the statement and the following discussion will support my cause. There are many positives of spending time with
books
.
Firstly
, it stimulates the imagination of the reader.
For example
, when you read a story, you imagine the plot, the characters which
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your thinking.
Secondly
, it enhances the linguistic and literary skills of
people
. A citizen of India can learn various languages like
chinese
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or
spanish
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by reading
the
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apply

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self learning
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language
books
.
In contrast
,
although
the
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films and television have various technological advances like VFX and CGI which provide the viewer
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of
the
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world experience , it usually is a
one sided
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information transfer.
People
just watch the
televison
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television

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passively and don't have to stimulate their
mind
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.
Moreover
, due to spending a lot of time staring at the screen,
people
also
develop refractive problems. In conclusion, I would say that
people
especially youngsters should be encouraged to develop the habit of reading
books
to benefit their minds .
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