Strength and Weakness analysis for the scholarship analysis

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My name is Sri Hernita Barus. I graduated with a Bachelor's degree

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Accounting in 2012 from the University of Indonesia, with a Cum Laude predicate. Since graduating, I took several roles around Accounting

such

as external auditor, accountant specialist, and tax. Other than doing regular job tasks, I have been involved in several operational finance projects, initiated the improvement projects of the accounting and finance

process

, and composed the Company's financial performance for management input. Having through various situations in professional work, I learned plenty of soft skills,

such

as communication, teamwork, goal-focus, and solution-minded. For the

last

two

years, I worked in a Start-up Company within

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technology industry. As an early employee, I have got the opportunity to build the operational

process

from scratch, experience the failures and quick changes to be aligned with the business focus. I am keen these experiences will be essential in my future

education

and work plan.

Although

my current experience is more into Finance, my passion is always aimed towards

children

education

. Since college, I joined a student volunteering organization that supports

education

for marginal

school

-aged

children

near campus by giving supplementary academic courses and informal activities. Since

then

, I started to enjoy working for less privileged

children

, especially for

education

. While working, I continued my passion by joining a Non-Governmental Organization (NGO) called “Sahabat Anak” (Friends of

Children

) as a volunteer.

This

organization aims to

support

the rights of street

children

located in Jakarta. I started volunteering in 2016 and took on several responsibilities from the tutor, project team, fundraiser committee, and

scholarship

coordinator at one of Sahabat Anak's branches for

two

years. In

this

role, I was responsible for maintaining the relationship between donors and awardees, observing the

scholarship

candidates, and conducting the

scholarship

selection

process

. Currently, I am still an active volunteer in Sahabat Anak, and over time, I am more convinced that the development field, specifically

children

education

, is my life's calling. During my volunteering in 2016, I met

two

out-of-

school

kids that actively came to our learning house and participated in our program. During our observation, they don’t have birth certificates and don’t have the knowledge to apply for one. Teaming up with other volunteers, we communicated with the parents to get their permission and

support

for their

children

’s

education

. In parallel, we collaborated with the private

school

committee to get more flexibility in the

school

enrolment

process

hence

the

children

can start

school

timely. I

also

registered them in our

scholarship

program to

support

their academic supplies.

As a result

, they are currently in the 5th grade and have obtained a birth certificate

this

year. The following year, I took the initiative to

support

two

stateless

children

who were excited about going to

school

. The

process

was much easier since we got

support

from parents and teamed up with volunteers with legal backgrounds to obtain the complete set of required identities.

Therefore

, the

children

can easily register in public schools with a free tuition fee.

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9Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

500 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Strength and Weakness analysis for the scholarship analysis

Include an introduction and conclusion

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