Strength and Weakness analysis for the scholarship analysis

My name is Sri Hernita Barus. I graduated with a Bachelor's degree
of
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Accounting in 2012 from the University of Indonesia, with a Cum Laude predicate. Since graduating, I took several roles around Accounting
such
as external auditor, accountant specialist, and tax. Other than doing regular job tasks, I have been involved in several operational finance projects, initiated the improvement projects of the accounting and finance
process
, and composed the Company's financial performance for management input. Having through various situations in professional work, I learned plenty of soft skills,
such
as communication, teamwork, goal-focus, and solution-minded. For the
last
two
years, I worked in a Start-up Company within
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technology industry. As an early employee, I have got the opportunity to build the operational
process
from scratch, experience the failures and quick changes to be aligned with the business focus. I am keen these experiences will be essential in my future
education
and work plan.
Although
my current experience is more into Finance, my passion is always aimed towards
children
's
education
. Since college, I joined a student volunteering organization that supports
education
for marginal
school
-aged
children
near campus by giving supplementary academic courses and informal activities. Since
then
, I started to enjoy working for less privileged
children
, especially for
education
. While working, I continued my passion by joining a Non-Governmental Organization (NGO) called “Sahabat Anak” (Friends of
Children
) as a volunteer.
This
organization aims to
support
the rights of street
children
located in Jakarta. I started volunteering in 2016 and took on several responsibilities from the tutor, project team, fundraiser committee, and
scholarship
coordinator at one of Sahabat Anak's branches for
two
years. In
this
role, I was responsible for maintaining the relationship between donors and awardees, observing the
scholarship
candidates, and conducting the
scholarship
selection
process
. Currently, I am still an active volunteer in Sahabat Anak, and over time, I am more convinced that the development field, specifically
children
's
education
, is my life's calling. During my volunteering in 2016, I met
two
out-of-
school
kids that actively came to our learning house and participated in our program. During our observation, they don’t have birth certificates and don’t have the knowledge to apply for one. Teaming up with other volunteers, we communicated with the parents to get their permission and
support
for their
children
’s
education
. In parallel, we collaborated with the private
school
committee to get more flexibility in the
school
enrolment
process
hence
the
children
can start
school
timely. I
also
registered them in our
scholarship
program to
support
their academic supplies.
As a result
, they are currently in the 5th grade and have obtained a birth certificate
this
year. The following year, I took the initiative to
support
two
stateless
children
who were excited about going to
school
. The
process
was much easier since we got
support
from parents and teamed up with volunteers with legal backgrounds to obtain the complete set of required identities.
Therefore
, the
children
can easily register in public schools with a free tuition fee.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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